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    dots Submission Name: What my desk would saydots

    Author: blackdemigod13
    Elite Ratio:    1.52 - 56/60/41
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    dotsWhat my desk would saydots

    I really hate when you out your books on me,
    It makes me feel sad, lonely, and un-free.
    When you put gum underneath my top,
    It makes me so mad I could pop.
    And when you flip me upside down,
    I feel like a sad clown.
    So the next time you come in the room,
    Don't be suprised if I look doomed.

    Submitted on 2011-08-24 09:44:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I love the idea of personification. You don't even have to rhyme it....just free flow and see what happens. Great idea not to mention that the comic potential rings clear. Thanks for sharing this.
    | Posted on 2011-09-12 00:00:00 | by EW61 | [ Reply to This ]
      kind of an interesting personification here...wish the last line was a bit stronger...end the piece with a bang...

    | Posted on 2011-08-24 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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