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    dots Submission Name: Old Moneydots
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    Author: charmedidentity
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    6.9 - 864/897/406
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       This piece is not so much about rich people as it is about people who have that "rich" attitude about themselves. Hope the snobbish attitude shows in the poem :D


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    dotsOld Moneydots
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    Fresh blood,
    we can sniff you from afar
    Fancy clothing doesn’t determine
    who you are.
    A breakthrough in the industry
    doesn't make you a star.
    We're not the same
    just because
    you have the same jaguar.
    Not even close if we're seen
    in the same high class bar.
    It doesn't matter if your struggles
    are worth writing a memoir.
    We're the old family;
    we know the rites
    of smoking a cigar.

    Fresh blood,
    do not be fooled by
    the rulers of this city,
    We have been here forever;
    we are the country's history.
    No one slips by us
    unnoticed;
    we are the almighty.
    Society's privileged;
    we are the equivalent of royalty.
    You do not simply get
    the pleasure of our company.
    No amount of praying will ever
    make you this lucky.
    We're the old family;
    we're made of old money.





    Submitted on 2011-08-24 12:58:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      My money's so old it's penicillin
    i laugh at your cash cause you're so willing
    to grovel like dogs for my approval
    I set the bar and wrote the rules
    then defined whose inside - the rest are fools
    | Posted on 2011-08-25 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      yes, it comes across very well...

    i really like beautiful people who have no idea they are beautiful...and rich people who are not only humble but extremely generous---this portrays that well....because this shows that bad side...

    and our response is...

    "you're not all that"

    and also what this portrays is the idea of people who have to make themselves look better by putting others down...for whatever reason...they can't feel good about themselves naturally...that is such a sad state of mind.

    part of this about the rulers...it reminds me of the fleetwood mac song..."gold dust woman" and that line

    "rulers make bad lovers; you better put your kingdom up for sale"


    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-08-24 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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