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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    There are sets of different wares lying all over the premises
    documented tablets and muli functional services
    colors to match the walls that match the curtains that are in theme with the dinner napkins
    pressure builds inside my head at all the different shades of light that lie to me
    champagne glasses and rolled up candy ciggarettes that whisper
    promises that touch my lips and seem to temporarily release the steam that rises like the sun
    just as faithfully as the day turns to night
    it breaks over my knee a black blanket of silhouettes expanding across the mirror of an endless ocean night
    above my head
    the stars glare and hold onto my breath
    and concentration




    Submitted on 2011-08-24 13:52:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your projection of the visual through words interests me so that I think, does your visual art do the opposite? I like the stars holding onto your breath - I can kind of feel it holding on to mine too.
    | Posted on 2011-08-24 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed this introspective piece that illustrates how "the worldly" things are often empty and how we are connected to the true nature within and without.

    Great!

    Lots of Love, Peace, Joy, Abundance, Beauty & Prosperous Healthy Smiles to Share ;-)
    | Posted on 2011-08-24 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      first line should be "lying"

    even though often "laying" might be used for better sound..and we can say poetic license...

    "lying" sounds better and is correct...well sorry jazmine, didn't mean to get into a grammar lesson...

    nature is so real...this poem speaks to me of that...but the beginning is something i relate to...that part speaks to me of appearances and perceptions...i grew up with a mother who worried so much about that...how people perceive us...how we always have to put out the best front...but i think just being natural is best...just being ourselves...not being aloof and all proper...everything doesn't perfectly match...

    what makes us think it can?

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-08-24 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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