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twisted


Author: brokenbylove
ASL Info:    26/m/australia
Elite Ratio:    1.27 - 63 /298 /259
Words: 190
Class/Type: Lyrics /What you did
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twisted



i did it again
laid my heart down
put it all on the line
once again in on my knees
i never saw the pain coming

im torn into so many pieces
ill never get myself back together again
im twisting this way and that
trying to find my way back
its a useless act

i let myself fall into a lie
i let my walls crumble down
you smiled while you killed me
the knife sinking into my heart
i always cared too much

im torn into so many pieces
ill never get myself back together again
im twisting this way and that
trying to find my way back
its a useless act

why dont you take whats left
rip me further apart
let it end take the rest of me
finish it with a real knife
the blood could release me
with the pain running through your hands

im twisting this way and that
trying to find my way back
you tore me apart
with on look i fell apart
i always cared too much...




Submitted on 2011-08-25 10:29:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Really like the twisting this way and that. Good imagery.
| Posted on 2011-08-28 00:00:00 | by RinFurie | [ Reply to This ]
  You got something going here, I like the rhythm. Still, the repetition of I in all those lines kinda breaks it. You could tune it up a bit, you can rephrase those lines so they don't all start with I...
| Posted on 2011-08-25 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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