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    dots Submission Name: Home at last:)dots

    Author: blackdemigod13
    Elite Ratio:    1.52 - 56/60/41
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsHome at last:)dots

    As I fell to the ground,
    My world was turning 'round.
    The sky went black,
    As my body went smack.
    As I lay there pondering my fate.
    I knew dinner would be late.
    My ankle was in pain,
    And I felt like I had nothing ekse to gain.
    My eyes drifted into a painful sleep,
    As my body withered and began to weep.
    I awoke to the sound of a night owl,
    And in the distance I heard a wolf howl.
    But the pain was gone,
    And a bright light shown.
    I looked to see my husband standing by my side,
    His smile engulfed me like an ocean tide.
    He pulled me into his chest,
    And I was finally happy we moved to the West.

    Submitted on 2011-08-26 09:24:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh yeah i was there when you wrote this lol i like the way you brought the family aspect into the writing. :)
    | Posted on 2011-08-26 00:00:00 | by kendraos | [ Reply to This ]

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