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Home at last:)

Author: blackdemigod13
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Home at last:)

As I fell to the ground,
My world was turning 'round.
The sky went black,
As my body went smack.
As I lay there pondering my fate.
I knew dinner would be late.
My ankle was in pain,
And I felt like I had nothing ekse to gain.
My eyes drifted into a painful sleep,
As my body withered and began to weep.
I awoke to the sound of a night owl,
And in the distance I heard a wolf howl.
But the pain was gone,
And a bright light shown.
I looked to see my husband standing by my side,
His smile engulfed me like an ocean tide.
He pulled me into his chest,
And I was finally happy we moved to the West.

Submitted on 2011-08-26 09:24:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Oh yeah i was there when you wrote this lol i like the way you brought the family aspect into the writing. :)
| Posted on 2011-08-26 00:00:00 | by kendraos | [ Reply to This ]

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