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    Author: metallichick786
    ASL Info:    26/f/Cali
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 78/85/51
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    If I was the Earth and he as my Sun
    I'd revolve around him as my only one
    If lust was my longing for you then I am cured
    for he has fulfilled all that I've yearned
    Without obstruction, I submit to him
    I'll beg for you, please you with your ever whim...
    I am your love slave, your servant, your pet and I thank you deeply universe for now that we've met :)




    Submitted on 2011-08-26 16:54:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Caitlyn, I was delighted to see that you had come by and left a message.

    This poem has just the right amount of sensuality and tenderness. It seems to pledge submission to someone very special.

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2011-08-27 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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