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    dots Submission Name: The Essencedots

    Author: Anneboleyn707
    ASL Info:    18/Female/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    3.96 - 44/84/67
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
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    dotsThe Essencedots

    In all displays of urgency

    My new stride takes me outwards;

    Out beyond where others follow;

    Farther still past far-fetched bigots,

    And rows upon rows of convoluted fallacies.

    I run with the wind,

    And feel my swinging limbs becoming free,

    Loosened by their fascination

    With grasping the world while my mind can follow suit;

    And out of breath I find my entity,

    All alone, all as one,

    Juxtaposed against a never-ending skyline.

    Content to bask in the essence that it is.

    Submitted on 2011-08-26 21:33:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I know exactly how you feel. I also know why. Humans who have never spend an hour alone in a forest or climbing up a hill don't know much of this world. City dwellers who have never experienced nature in it's raw form live in a fantasy world constructed by us humans. I think that is the essence of what you are trying to express here: sometimes things don't have to be overcomplicated like some people make them out to be, they can be really simple and you can enjoy them without giving too much thought about it...
    | Posted on 2012-10-10 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Juxtaposed against a never-ending skyline.

    Content to bask in the essence that it is.

    This was very enjoyable, wonderfully written!

    | Posted on 2011-08-29 00:00:00 | by AltheaLaochra | [ Reply to This ]
      Joy is good. Spread it well I say.
    | Posted on 2011-08-29 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      i can't run. or at least run for very long. but i really like where this takes me. it's endorphine filled.

    i think when alone and out of reach of other things that are drag down negatives there can be a sense of being that takes over... while i can't run, i do find it walking, or out on my stoop, or when my hands and knees are dirty from gardening. i enjoy the oneness of of a 'human merely being' (i sorta stole that line because i like it and well it is always fitting).


    i enjoyed the read.
    | Posted on 2011-08-27 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]
      there is an ideal world out there...one where everyone is equal...and love is given in balance...

    where prejudice is a word unheard...

    it's that beautiful skyline...where the sun never sets...and peace and brotherhood shine.

    but alas..the night always seems to come..life is not like that...and the moon can be so dim because of hate...there are only shadows and darkness.

    i like this piece...i like the way it expresses its theme.

    | Posted on 2011-08-26 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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