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    dots Submission Name: Random rantdots

    Author: dreamer37517
    ASL Info:    25/F/Bama
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 161/149/49
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Rant/Venting
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       Dont even bother reading it. I just had to let it out.

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    dotsRandom rantdots

    He hurt me again.
    I try to hide the pain.
    Keep my smile in place.
    Inside I'm going insane.

    He did it again.
    He talked to his ex.
    Made me feel like NOTHING.
    I know now, I read the text.

    He plays this game.
    Acts all normal to me.
    Then says things to her.
    He thinks that I wont see.

    He hurt me again.
    But will I put up with it.
    How can I trust him anymore.
    I'm tired of this shit.

    Submitted on 2011-08-27 12:41:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nicely spoken for a rant. I like the last stanza where you almost contradict yourself saying you will put up with him but you can't because of the things he's put you through, very powerful. The first stanza is wonderful in the way that you feel the pain inside but won't let it be shown to the world. On and additional point he deserves to be alone. Great rant and wonderfully written.

    | Posted on 2011-08-29 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]

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