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    dots Submission Name: the beast withindots
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    Author: RinFurie
    Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 4/9/8
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsthe beast withindots
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    Lust, pain, and blood filled the air
    her steel color eyes closed, she screams
    Blood trickling down her lips
    musked in fear, muscles tense

    the beast inside ripping at her sanity
    the clock ticking away as she prays
    Looking into his eyes, slowly giving in
    pain pulses through her veins, letting out another cry

    her nails turn to claws, flesh covered in fur
    everything breaking and rearranging
    she reaches out for him, a plea for help





    Submitted on 2011-08-27 22:33:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Great piece of poetry, I like the imagery! Great piece!
    | Posted on 2011-09-06 00:00:00 | by Skinwalker | [ Reply to This ]
      Well to be honest... I was expecting an ending so much more different ( based on the beginning you gave us ) .... But I really do enjoy how the end took me off guard. Now ( as I say to everyone ) I am no expert poet.. But I do know a good piece when I see one. Great write. Keep it up. :)
    | Posted on 2011-08-28 00:00:00 | by unwantedlove20 | [ Reply to This ]


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