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    dots Submission Name: Im Your Unwanted Love part 2dots
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    Author: unwantedlove20
    Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 16/12/11
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Cudnt finish it the first time... Have like two more parts coming up... Please do read :)


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    dotsIm Your Unwanted Love part 2dots
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    And a massive lump
    Begins to form in my throught

    I dont want you to be
    The last thing I think of before I go to sleep
    The first person that appears in my dreams
    I dont want one of your deceiving texts
    Reminding me of everytime
    I fell so stupidly for you
    Every time
    First thing in the morning
    I dont want to remind myself
    Of every single moment we've spent together

    Recently, you've changed
    You're not the kindhearted
    Sencitive dork I fell in love with
    You're now an attractive
    Malefic jerk
    But I still love you
    Why?




    Submitted on 2011-08-28 01:28:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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