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    dots Submission Name: God's Intervention?dots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsGod's Intervention?dots
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    If God created the universe,
    Including all living things,
    I believe it was an idea so perverse,
    To create the power in kings,

    The ambition in politicians,
    And the greed in human kind,
    The lies that expand like a beak on a pelican,
    With the man made religions and shrines.

    Yet the origination of the lethal injection,
    And the purpose to do God's intentions,
    Has me puzzled with a question,
    With so much hell on earth,
    Where is God's Intervention?




    Submitted on 2011-08-31 21:58:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      what a good question, and such a pertinent write considering all that is going on these days...

    and those damn pelicans with their gluttonous beaks getting bigger and full of more fish than they could ever need...

    while the rest of us starve, and are too poor to fly.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-09-01 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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