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    dots Submission Name: My Father Wasn't Theredots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsMy Father Wasn't Theredots
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    I became accustomed,
    With living my whole life,
    Alongside denial and excuses,
    This lifetime must of,
    Not been that hyped,
    Or for my choosing.

    Yet I kept a spark,
    Of light ignited for plan b,
    And even though,
    I was overwhelmed with the dark,
    I had to overthrow,
    The negativity sorrounding me.

    Used to cry when I was little,
    Just to feel comfort sort of speak,
    The tears fell down my cheek in riddles,
    Life is really unfair!
    Older I realized that only the weak,
    Seem to blame their defeats,
    On a simple phrase,
    'My father wasn't there!'




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      i agree with jacob. many blame their behaviour on the way they were brought up and i sometimes feel they just don't want to accept the fact that it still is your behaviour, not your father's or mother's or whoever raised you...

    But sometimes i understand cos, you know, for some time in my life, when i was a little girl, i was abused by a family friend...and i believe that God gave me the gift of writing so i can let out all those memories, and i'm glad i have somewhere to channel them. i guess i have turned out ok, but when i set eyes on him oneday, you won't believe the rage i felt..i could not believe it myself. i wanted to hurt him real bad, but i didn't...i vented the rage onto paper, and thats how come i wrote the poem 'abused abuser'..

    people just need a better way to deal with situations like that.

    nice.
    | Posted on 2011-09-01 00:00:00 | by Amma | [ Reply to This ]
      i agree with jacob. many blame their behaviour on the way they were brought up and i sometimes feel they just don't want to accept the fact that it still is your behaviour, not your father's or mother's or whoever raised you...

    But sometimes i understand cos, you know, for some time in my life, when i was a little girl, i was abused by a family friend...and i believe that God gave me the gift of writing so i can let out all those memories, and i'm glad i have somewhere to channel them. i guess i have turned out ok, but when i set eyes on him oneday, you won't believe the rage i felt..i could not believe it myself. i wanted to hurt him real bad, but i didn't...i vented the rage onto paper, and thats how come i wrote the poem 'abused abuser'..

    people just need a better way to deal with situations like that.

    nice.
    | Posted on 2011-09-01 00:00:00 | by Amma | [ Reply to This ]
      i was overwhelmed by the dark because i didn't have a father there to teach me not to be afraid.

    but somehow i survived, and yet as i aged i realized, this happens to many of us.

    we lose parents, or they don't seem to care about us when we are younger, or they abuse us and it ends up for many to be the perfect excuse for behaviour...

    we blame our parents for ourselves, not willing to take on the responsibilities for our own actions.

    why can we not see that seeing how they were was a great example of how we should not be...there is a lesson in the negativity of life...many of them...and we must learn and not blame.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-09-01 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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