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    dots Submission Name: Jellyfish (Forever an Om)dots
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    Author: NoMartyr
    ASL Info:    18/M/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 33/97/91
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1019
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    Description:
       Ishtar's immortality atoms.


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    dotsJellyfish (Forever an Om)dots
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    I was swimming with jellyfish
    So afraid to die
    I looked through to the other side
    and the grass was nicer
    I will stumble in the details
    Artist or a liar
    I will grasp the intangible
    I will take you higher

    Goddamn my eyes
    Forever blind to see
    All this infinity
    Right in front of me
    And still be blessed with this vessel to death
    Gotta shed your carapace to swim with the jellyfish

    I was swimming with jellyfish
    Unafraid to die
    I was shedding my carapace
    To place my fears inside
    I will stumble in the details
    The devil fogs my mind
    Until the bigger picture's revealed
    Hidden between the lines

    Rearranged.

    One selection reflects the collection
    Dissected forever in any direction
    Split it, inspect it, give into perplexion
    You missed it, the detail's the devils possession
    My own insecurity blinds me
    Deprives me from what's just beyond the eyes reach
    Obscuring divinity, without and within me
    Letting mortality distract me eternally

    Rearranged.




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      The accurately describes the condition of those who seek answers, particularly that of mortality versus immortality. Quite good, particularly the last stanza. The plan is to keep you looking, keep you thinking, tease a little more... push you a little further. And yes, it is a plan fathered and directed by an ultimate reality which if you ever do recognize (aha!) the crux of it will subsequently be taken away to let you start again . It IS there. Accept that, and one can find peace.
    | Posted on 2011-09-02 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      this made me think of will smith's movie "seven pounds"

    i want to rearrange my life, get it all in order and then swim with the jellyfish and let nature take its course.


    this had a smooth feel and really good wording...felt the angst.


    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-09-01 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Very....insightful write.
    An introspection or fear...but why fear? Kind of tone. That's what I felt.
    I felt like I was studying buddhism again.

    Pretty cool
    | Posted on 2011-09-01 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]


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