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    dots Submission Name: Anticipationdots
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    Author: RinFurie
    Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 4/9/8
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       There has been a lot of things happening lately and I find it hard to say certain words without fear of judgement or very bad repercussion. This poem speaks volumes sadly I don't think it will be heard.


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    Heart racing, tears trickling
    Pain feeding upon her desires
    Punished for her sins
    Her body begins to ache

    Wings broken, eyes filled with anguish
    Freedom she craves
    Amongst the stars she waits
    Struggling with the burning chains

    Bruises, scrapes, and burns on her fair skin
    With every pull a new bone breaks
    Back arched, Fear peeked
    Hoping he will find her

    How could he when he doesn’t even know
    Unspoken words of love linger on her tongue
    Bitter and strong, gnawing away
    Sweet illusions creeping amongst the galaxies




    Submitted on 2011-09-02 00:25:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it reads like me
    or the pain when I was in my teens
    | Posted on 2011-09-02 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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