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The Tune


Author: blackdemigod13
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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The Tune



On the night of the full moon,
I saw a man sing a tune.
He was sad,
And the tune was bad.
He did not look glad,
And to see me mad him mad.
I would have seen what was wrong,
But I was scared of his song.




Submitted on 2011-09-02 09:26:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  HORRIBLE JUST HORRIBLE!!!!!!!! LOL JK VERY GOOD ONE SYLLABLE POEM!!!

LOVE CLIFFORD :)
| Posted on 2011-09-02 00:00:00 | by kendraos3 | [ Reply to This ]


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