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    dots Submission Name: From My Burning Soul Eye'sdots
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    Author: Mr.Ordinary
    ASL Info:    21/M/Navy
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 64/102/41
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 284
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       just some thoughts, i was gonna write more but i cant stop crying and im sure you got my drift.


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    dotsFrom My Burning Soul Eye'sdots
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    I see the world from my Burning Soul Eye's
    Something fierce I have to cry

    Round and round the world spins
    My skin is full of searing pins

    Oh the ache, oh the pain
    Will I ever feel again?

    Up is down and down is right
    How ever world did I lose this fight?

    Some wounds are old, some are new
    Some infected and some are blue

    If pain and pain is all ill get
    Thats fine by me, use the whip










    Submitted on 2011-09-03 04:04:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      mmm i liked this but the flow at the end doesn't seem to match the beginning. it all makes sence but the rhyming isn't there at the end like it is blantly there in the beginning. anyhew good write i can see what your saying in this. i like the way you painted the picture how your body phyically felt

    jackz
    | Posted on 2011-09-04 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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