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    dots Submission Name: From my heart to yoursdots
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    Author: ShadowsnLights
    ASL Info:    25 f canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.24 - 71/107/66
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Serious
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    dotsFrom my heart to yoursdots
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    Can you hear the rain drops falling?

    Can you taste the fresh air flowing?

    Can you smell the flowers unfolding?

    Can you see the tall grass dancing?

    Can you feel my heartbeat next to yours?


    To live in a world filled with senses, yet to be blind to it all is... NO LIFE AT ALL.

    Life is waiting. Go out and enjoy it. :)




    Submitted on 2011-09-03 16:41:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      simple and sweet. Keep it up :)
    | Posted on 2011-09-08 00:00:00 | by Iram | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the meaning but It needs to be fine tuned a little.
    | Posted on 2011-09-05 00:00:00 | by RinFurie | [ Reply to This ]
      i think the thought behind it is there. and the emotion is as well. it just needs to be a little bit more fine tuned and fleshed out. it sounds like a quotation/inspirational quote. not sure if this is what you were going for though

    cheers
    Kat
    | Posted on 2011-09-04 00:00:00 | by moonlitsky | [ Reply to This ]


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