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    dots Submission Name: Coward's Carapacedots

    Author: Soul-Hugger
    ASL Info:    33/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 401/217/62
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Insanity is doing the same thing over and over and expecting different results. - Albert Einstein.

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    dotsCoward's Carapacedots

    Re-Play. Re-Play. Re-Play. Re-

    The cassette is stuck,
    my thumb holds down the button as though
    it has a will of its own.
    Its impression is on my skin. It breathes.
    My body becomes its own separate entity, speaking to me;
    sebaceous glands pop as though to say "rise up
    out of your chair and face the day, glowing"
    heart flutters its stilted message of guilt & remorse, nerves patter & jump their flustered rhythm.

    Life is the rhythm of a drum that i dance to with graceful inaccuracy

    Dance, then, you marionette.
    Shake your limbs as though no-one is watching.
    Flood your room with light from the window.

    Submitted on 2011-09-04 13:07:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Agreed, this piece reminds me of the monotony faced by facing each day, unless we become something shiny and new the day will always be able to paint us with it's monologue of familiarity. I like it.
    | Posted on 2011-09-05 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]
      marionettes dance out of sync...

    and you have such a great line with the oxymoron "graceful inaccuracy"

    we've got to stop the rut, break out, do a different dance...

    be spontaneous...we aren't that enough.

    i like this piece and wouldn't change a thing..although i guess i am supposed to say something needs to be fixed, but sorry...don't feel that way

    i like the cassette part especially...cause cassettes are out of date...and being the same over and over gets very tired and out of date too.

    nice piece, erin

    | Posted on 2011-09-04 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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