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Author: Rainwater
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Class/Type: Poetry /Being a Teen
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I fancy the word "to-day". I need to be less of a hormonal teenager. Pardon.


But I am tired to-day
I am worn to-day
The vultures are circling me to-day

Submitted on 2011-09-04 21:28:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  do you have anything else to say today
any new words with which to play
or prank the cosmos as it melts
then pulses like a second self

Just what your work inspired me to write.
| Posted on 2011-09-05 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
  hmm well i guess i understand what you mean by vultures circling you. being a teen is never easy and sometimes you just feel worn out and tired. hopeless even. but thats what writing is for i guess, releasing your inner emotions about the difficulties you face.

and btw no need to apologize for that

| Posted on 2011-09-04 00:00:00 | by moonlitsky | [ Reply to This ]

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