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    dots Submission Name: Hidden Worlddots

    Author: RinFurie
    Elite Ratio:    1.97 - 4/9/8
    Words: 312
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsHidden Worlddots

    Open the door and step inside
    My thoughts await you, do not hide
    This hidden world with its secret paths
    Here my ambitions live, alas

    Sun rays reaching every corner
    The magic mist lingers at your feet
    Continue walking, you might find something good
    Do you really wish to know me?

    Well here is your chance for I let you in
    Streams bubbling, creatures dancing amongst the grass
    Oh look another door, do you dare?
    I cannot promise your safety there

    Swinging it open with one pull
    The world twisting and turning, you fool
    Light becomes dark, warmth becomes cold
    Those creatures you saw are now after your soul

    Crawling longingly towards you
    Fangs bared, eyes lit
    Their acid saliva drips, burning the ground
    Muscles bound, ready to strike

    Their long tongues lapping at the air
    They can taste your fear
    You dare make a battle stance?
    Run, Run while you can

    No one has lived within my head
    Sometimes not even me
    They will tear away at your flesh
    Please I beg of you, go now!

    Their bodies crouched, sleek like a cat
    No! No! I don't want to be alone!
    The floor cracks and shakes beneath your feet
    Walls crumbling, shadows consuming

    The air filled with my own shrieks
    Please leave I cannot lose another!
    Your stance unmoving
    Please I beg of you

    You look back with a smirk upon your face
    The demons closing you in
    Steel claws slicing through the air
    Blood spattered walls, but no screams

    I sit there in a trance
    As they gnaw on what is left
    I welcomed you inside my head
    I should not be surprised

    No one can last here
    I should of never let you in
    For I might of loved you
    But now this is the end

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