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    dots Submission Name: Daysdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsDaysdots
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    there are four corners as I am standing here my feet are flat as I am bolted to the ground by the constant movement

    the stars are shining, gas is igniting, fire is galactic

    my feet are bolted to the ground

    lava vibrations flow up from the roots of the photosynthesized planes
    educated background grazing
    sticking fingers
    intertwining with lightning bolts that snuck in from condensated paralells

    and scuffle of winds break in and melt the spilot
    I am the captain of my toes
    my feet are planted in the sun
    bolted to the atmosphere grasping at the light
    I saw through a window of forrests and skies





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      Happy day ~*~ I loved this piece because it made me think of what we "feel" and "what is really there".

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    | Posted on 2011-09-06 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      this reminds me of Giant City State Park here in Makanda, Illinois...you can go up on the water tower and look out and see where 4 states converge..

    this is like how life converges on us...and we seem unable to take a step forward...we stand still...we look out the window at the forest and skies...but will we go out side..walk into the forest or under the sky? take that chance?

    who knows...
    thoughtful write...last line it should be "forests"

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-09-05 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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