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    dots Submission Name: Child's Playdots
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    Author: moonlitsky
    Elite Ratio:    5.96 - 70/44/15
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsChild's Playdots
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    tic tac toe
    X O X O
    one loses, the other the victor
    a child's game
    that translates well beyond a youngin's years

    a security dilemna
    what do we do?
    bombs crash an uncertain target
    lives destroyed
    the struggle for power has begun
    but when will it come to an end?
    with one resounding defeat?
    unlikely

    tic tac toe
    X O X O
    children caught in fire of a child's game
    when will humanity act human?
    have we killed enough yet?

    a simple game thats all it is
    one loses, the other the victor
    but at what expense?




    Submitted on 2011-09-06 02:29:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That's what it feels like sometimes from the view from here. Children playing a game, a winner and a loser, countries fighting a war, a winner and a loser.
    I would like to point out that most tic tac toe games end in a draw...hmmmmm. What could that say about war? After everything is done and all the borders change a little, sometimes they don't change. The result is a lot of people died, and a lot of lives ruined, a lot of cities destroyed. And for what?

    Matt
    | Posted on 2011-09-06 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]
      this reminds me of the movie "War Games."

    "would you like to play a game?"

    like a child's game, but much more serious...i see in this poem many things such as war yes, on a larger scale...but i also see war of turfs, drive bys where innocents get killed...

    and even in major wars, when there is resounding defeat, what does it accomplish..look at that civil war....all the strife afterwards, all the sore losers who did not comply even after the war was over, who still held on to outdated beliefs...no one really wins a fight or a war...there are just repercussions that injure, maim all involved...physical scars, emotional scars...
    a very sad cycle of events always...

    i like the analogy you use...the almost harmless feeling in this...but we know better. a game of x's and o's just like football or basketball..but with altogether different meaning.



    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-09-06 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Such a simple game yet so easy to get a sore loser and have things escalate into some unstable situations, yes one wins and one loses, there must always be a winner to be a loser and so it is all part of a cycle,

    I like how you convey more serious messages through a simple game like tic-tac-toe, I enjoyed reading it.
    | Posted on 2011-09-06 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]


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