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    Author: AbsolutelyLost
    ASL Info:    27/M/India
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 54/41/33
    Words: 1550
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
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    Description:
       I had written this a while back, and had stopped. You may find too much description, and less dialogue (or missing) at times. Am thinking whether to proceed on this or not !!!


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    As per the calendar years it was 2827 AD.

    The first time he met her was at the coffee shop.

    She had come from the planet of hope, one of the many known planets of habitation in the modern universe. The solar system was part of the pre BC era in the present day era, better known as the Prithvi era.

    She was right there sipping coffee, and as though was waiting for him to show up. It seemed that he knew she was there and was calling for him.

    “Hi … are you waiting for me?” he had asked, as though he knew that she was to fall in love with him. There was a strange spark and energy in his eyes, a vibrant smile which had disappeared since long, and the fragrance of his shabbiness.

    “Actually, I have not been expecting some one like you. You can sit here if you wish to.” she said being rather pleased with the comfort of his company. As she said, she smiled and her eyes drew him closer to her as if they were magnets and he was rusted iron.

    He often used to hang out at the coffee shop. It was just like any other coffee shop, which served just the traditional types of coffee – hot, cold, and chocolaty. The differentiator however was that it was the only one hanging in mid air for the individuals at Vayu-Veers, the legendary school of air engineering.

    Vayu-Veers foundations went way back to the early 21st century. The time had come to make room in the air for one and all. Land rates had shot higher than sky. Ever since the mammoth epidemics and catastrophes, there was less than three percent land left habitable, the space constraints killing the lot.

    The age called for path breaking technology. Skyscrapers could not be the solutions. It was because the thirty percent planet, which was land, had now become either a marshy base or had disappeared under the surging oceans. It was equatorial to extreme all around. The tectonic plates had deformed, disturbing the serene balance between land and water, which had preserved humanity for ages. The deformity lead to flattening of the containment of oceans, and instead of being a container, the base of oceans flattened out, and they engulfed more and more land. The only land that was left was either that close to the poles or that close to the Himalayas.

    It was then that a tribal knowledge, kept hidden for centuries came to light. In these events of the past, due to the deformation, there was a dissemination of knowledge, which could never have been discovered by humans otherwise.

    This was knowledge of perhaps civilizations that existed in the pre BC era. Beneath the deepest parts of the Pacific Ocean, there was an abundance of habitation, which would perhaps have existed when it was over the water once. Alternately, they existed, perished because of a catastrophe, and the remains disappeared due to the movement of the tectonic plates.

    The limitations of humans deprived them from exploring what was there. The deformation however ripped the earth apart. Apart from the core, every part of the planet got shuffled. This was primarily attributed to the ways of humans. Nobody really bothered about letting the planet be. They used their imagination and inadvertently caused harm to themselves. Consequently, the balance between cardinal elements went way out of balance. This attracted not only local catastrophes, but also hazards from the unknown universe.

    When one planet loses its equilibrium, it causes others to lose theirs as well. The same happened with planet Earth. Planetoids collided with Earth, leaving it shattered and almost marooned.

    In this maze, there were a lot of attempts made by the known nations of the 21st era. However, man is but futile before the forces of nature. Consequently, a lot of folks just perished. There however remained few who were those close to high regions of the planet of that era.

    Vayu-Veers came to existence because of the knowledge of gurus of the lost tribe, whom they called Vayu Rishis. Artifacts of the civilizations below the Pacific revealed scriptures of extremely simple, yet complicated technology.

    Interestingly, these scriptures came afloat right in front of those who survived – as if they were sent by a supernatural being for rescuing those whom the being felt worthy of living and starting the civilization again.

    There were big boxes with mostly air within. Apart from that there were plenty of banana leaves with drawings and text in Vayu-Veda. The Vayu-Rishis were wise men. They knew that if they were to convey the teachings of what they knew, they had to pen them down. They made sure that whosoever tried to interpret got to understand what Vayu-Veda was. Each of the big boxes had one thing in common – Veda-Grantha. These were scriptures made in gold, and had rare stones, especially big shiny rubies and diamonds, embedded on the cover. Consequently, they drew attention at the very moment one opened the chest.

    The wisdom of Vayu-Rishis was reflected by the mere description of the syntax of Vayu-Veda on the gold leaves. The Veda-Grantha was diligently organized. On the very top there was the symbol of the sun – round with rays emanating from it, and each ray being endowed with a jewel. They provided Vayu-Grantha as a book with three pages. The first page described the alphabets. On the top they listed all the alphabets. Then they took one alphabet at a time and explained each one. All alphabets were associated with a sound, a fruit, and a shape – each being depicted as an image. They used the simplest of sounds which had their special features – sounds of animals, human behavior and environment. Depicting sound, taste and form visually explained the reader with ease the alphabet. The second page explained the grammar. Combination was explained by tying of ropes, hand shakes, highlights were explained by shiny particles, separation was explained by broken pieces of art, and the most interesting was absence – depicted by a dead body.

    The third and the last was an elegant depiction of man’s existence. This explained the balance between the various forms of nature. It was what Vayu-Rishis considered the most important to convey. The image was of a man coupled to a woman. The right hand of the male held a half-eaten apple close to his lips, and other forms of existence on his left. The left hand of woman was close to her lips shaped as to depict drinking, with water flowing from above. They both stood firmly on a stone made afloat by a cloud. To the left of the man there was a big tree and animals, and to the right of the woman was the depiction of growth stages of a baby – from the stage of birth to death. The baby was depicted sucking on the female’s breast, and from birth to death were images of various stages and various acts of a human – learning to walk, mingle, live, love, and die.

    Each box had specific material and relating to living, health, faith, balance and science. The boxes were close to each other. The Vayu-Rishis believed that if they were to convey what all they knew, they had to keep the literature together. The interweaving of boxes was made using bones – making sure that they exist through ages. The box themselves were carefully grafted, made of skin of animals and shells.

    Once discovered, it was not much of a problem to establish Vayu-Veers.

    He barely knew anything about anything when he was taken aboard in Vayu-Veers.

    It seemed to him like he was again the 8 year old, as he was when he was admitted to Vayu-Veers. He felt the same joy and enthusiasm despite being 28 now.

    “You don’t seem to be from this place” he said in his monotonous childish voice.

    “That is indeed true, I am from the planet of hope” she continued moving her fingers in the empty air and kept staring at the emptiness as she responded.

    “I see. Have you come to free me as the air itself?” he asked with eyes wide open, and eyebrows raised as if he genuinely hoped someone had to come to his rescue.

    “Are you nuts? I have come here to understand Vayu-Shastra. The modern universe needs to be benefited with what you people have incepted over the centuries. It is but a pity that you guys bind your people from moving to new places to preserve your knowledge.

    “Do you think you would be able to leave after you have learnt what we know?” he asked her trying to gain her attention.

    “I believe you people don’t really believe in not letting others live” she responded trying to explain her situation.

    They sat there watching the setting sun - a scene which he barely missed in his entire life.




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