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    Author: InsanityVanity
    ASL Info:    19/male/noneyah
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 8/23/28
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    The storm clouds roar over head
    The torrent of hail and rain, I’m buffeted
    Beaten battered and bruised
    The hard exterior is cracked
    Exposing his greatest secret…
    For inside this rough and tough being is…
    Nothing…
    Walking forward forever
    Onward to nothing at all
    Just walking…
    For what purpose does this now brittle shell have
    To never stop moving
    He doesn’t…
    Its just leftover impulses
    Left over by the light and energy
    That once pranced in this cold exterior
    Like a used up propain tank
    Rolling down an endless hill
    No synapses to begin to refill itself
    Just walk
    Walk for nothing
    So good he’s empty
    If there were a thought
    There would be fear
    As the world around is just as empty
    Heavy winds impact him with sand
    Walking on
    Being slowly broken
    Until
    Only dust is still moving
    Soon even that will fade away…




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