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    dots Submission Name: Releasedots

    Author: AshleyDYoung
    ASL Info:    19/F/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 28/33/34
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 421
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    "Can I ask you a question?" I said looking at the ground and trying to control it
    Sweet anger brewing inside, I had never tasted anything so bitter,
    never felt something so powerful. Then she answered tick
    "Yeah whatever" "Where you the cause?" she smiled tick
    "I guess, but I was only trying to make him happy." BOOM
    Without thought walked up behind her
    Wrapping my arm around her throat squeezed as hard as I possibly could.
    Completely lead by rage and pain, and almost turned on from the release.
    She whimpered, but still i held. Her Simi long nails dug deep into my arm,
    the pain felt good... it only fueled me more i squeezed tighter.
    i felt her body begin to release and become weak,
    the feeling was almost like finishing your orgasm
    When i felt her hanging there, I knew she was gone and i felt inner peace.

    Submitted on 2011-09-07 06:24:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Words have been chosen here, emphasis placed upon them. Making them more powerful than the ones that tie them together, the words worth more than the sum of their letters if you know what I mean. Somewhere between these words and the others, lies the story. It feels like the piece bled out of you, that it was, once released, unstoppable... but focused. It shows in the transition, but it matches the piece in its naked anger.
    Written as writing should be, governed by emotions and not the status quo.
    | Posted on 2011-09-09 00:00:00 | by Drayke | [ Reply to This ]
      Woa what did I just read? Sounds like some twisted dream.

    Good work?

    | Posted on 2011-09-07 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]

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