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    dots Submission Name: We are heredots
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    Author: Joybell
    ASL Info:    22/F/MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 101/94/56
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsWe are heredots
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    We are here.
    Standing on the edge of life

    we don’t even understand

    what is about to take place
    between one woman
    and one man.

    Pretty flowers
    pretty dresses
    your friends
    my friends

    Is this the beginning or is this the end

    Music that will float us into our new life plays
    Stillness in the air as he asks if we do

    Moments passed, people clap
    That was it,lets step into so called “wedded bliss”

    I hear we have a 50/50 chance
    Let’s hold hands as we dance

    I wish someone would have prepared me for this
    Pause for camera flash, one more kiss

    Mad dash for the car

    At last, here we are.
    Man and wife, on paper so white.
    Now, to live our life.




    Submitted on 2011-09-08 09:06:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It's accurate, but I find it too empty-
    Could've been so much stronger.

    But I...support this.
    And I'm glad you posted it. I haven't read any wedding sort of prose's in a while.
    | Posted on 2011-09-18 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]
      this would be a nice poem to have someone read at the wedding...

    that piece of paper...changes things...

    i like this piece, well worded.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-09-08 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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