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You stopped me that time
When you climbed into the treehouse
And stood beside my little nephew
Looking out the way he does.
Hard to hurt a girl like that.
You were right.
The trips that I planned to the little detail,
New Orleans and Mobile,
Bay St. Louis and Birmingham,
Were bland to the point of offense.
And though people kept up with us
I was happier
That the animal kingdom had taken notice.
The deer and bobcats
behind the museum in Jackson,
The pelican and dolphins down in Orange Beach.
Even Patches, the blue heeler of wonder,
Pawed you in approval.
How could we forget
The young man proposing at the resevoir
Under the hot pink sunset
Or the not one, but two, honeymooning couples
Getting out of bright muscle cars
On their way to the Tutweiller
While we watched from our table
By Linn Park?
I wish I could dance the way you like.
I wish I could kiss you the way you want.
But I don’t have it.
At least, not yet.
all come by themselves
When they’re ready.
And it’s hard to hurt a girl like you.
Ridgeland, MS – 9/8/11
| I don't even know what to say... *Hugs you* i hope you feel better soon, ive been there to. ||| Posted on 2011-09-09 00:00:00 | by AshleyDYoung | [ Reply to This ] || this piece is quite descriptive...i like it, but found it a little hard to relate to it...i think the title threw me a bit...would like to see the title be a bit less specific and more universal...although much of the poem is addressing a particular relationship and just what these two people experienced, the last two stanzas allow the reader in...allow the reader to associate him or herself with the poem....we have all experienced that...|
really strong write...but i would adjust the title and leave the name out...and even the rest of the title is almost like a warning...this poem is not for you the reader, so stay away.
|| Posted on 2011-09-08 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ] || This was very well written and it hit deep.|
I like the set up in the first stanza. "Hard to hurt a girl like that." Such a great line.
The imagery in this is so vivid. It's not all in your face either, I like that.
Very descriptive, and again well written. It's not like you told everything, you let some things be unsaid, which is a good thing to do, it really helps the reader connect with the poem.
Great write. Favorited.
|| Posted on 2011-09-08 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ] |