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    dots Submission Name: remember, learn, love, respect.dots
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    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    25/ DFW
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 585/498/311
    Words: 362
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsremember, learn, love, respect.dots
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    we live in this world
    we burn through the atmosphere
    and we cause all the chaos
    and we cause all the pain
    how can we take things back
    when we've already spit them from our mouths
    and as were cutting people and trees
    we weep because we feel the victim is us
    and the temps are always soaring
    as are the planes that they were flying
    and everyday is a memorial
    not just for people but for things
    and everything is always different after 24 hours
    and the world always looks so strange
    when your upside down
    so how can we go back, how can we restart this
    if we were ever given the chance to change
    i hope we take it
    with arms, eyes and hearts wide open
    i hope we can forgive and learn to forget
    because we live everyday like its our last
    and one day it will be
    because were burning through the sky
    and the desert is sweeping in again
    and the terrorist must never win
    so please just listen to this plea
    stop the injustice, stop the pain
    lets drop our guns and live in peace
    but peace is something not many of us will ever find
    so lets strive on and live to better ourselves
    lets save the planet before its too late
    lets remember those lives lost on that fateful day.

    how can you not remember anything
    when they teach us not to forget
    the force their pictures in our faces
    they show us just how bad this world has gotten
    the grass is turning into dust
    and people are still burning the world up
    theirs not a chance that god will give us
    because we have become ignorant
    and we have taken everything for granted
    we need to learn to love again
    and we need to learn to respect the world
    and i know that i will never forget
    because the pictures are burned across my brain.

    so pause, reflect and remember
    the past must never repeat
    so lets move on and go forward
    lets save us, not just for us
    but for everyone for has died for us.




    Submitted on 2011-09-09 23:08:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can really feel ur emotion in this piece .. I can feel the yearning for things to get better & I can relate to that feeling
    I think it was very readable & easy to follow it also had a great message .. Will be reading more from you :-)
    | Posted on 2011-09-15 00:00:00 | by KiHoodie | [ Reply to This ]


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