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    dots Submission Name: Lasting Scarsdots

    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
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       Why... Why couldn't my mom stop him.. why didn't she at least try?

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    dotsLasting Scarsdots

    In the early morning hours
    Tears surface to my cheeks
    My arms thrashing
    The memories are so vivid

    My heart lies in the pit of my stomach
    I can feel a cold hand upon my warm skin
    Moving underneath my clothes
    I can feel his breath hitting my now naked body
    As you lean in to whisper
    "Jacquelyn this is the only way I can show you my love"
    Your hand is now between my legs

    I awaken...
    In the early morning hours
    Tears have been streaming down my cheeks
    These nightmares leave me broken�

    For that is all I am
    A young lady ... abused� broken�And beaten
    My soul is so lost ... darkness has become its home

    Forever marked as damaged goods, most cannot see
    But I know I am scarred and un-repairable

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      PS i am going to post one of my many poems re this subject to share with you i will read through my old writings and share more, once i have time to sit and type them up again...stormy
    | Posted on 2012-01-27 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow incredibly raw and very sad. I am truly sorry that you have experienced such pain, again i know all too well the feelings you describe. I want to assure you- you are not irreparable and the scars will fade and eventually the nightmares wil stop.. you may never forget but you can and will heal..your strength shines through something your mum didnt have ..hang in there..and if you ever need to talk let me know im happy to give you my email....stormy
    | Posted on 2012-01-27 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      This made me cry. It is very well written and heart wrenching. I've been there, I know how it feels. Writing helps and hurts, but helps mostly.
    It never gets better, but it does get easier.
    This is beautifully written.

    Keep up the great work and I'll keep reading..

    | Posted on 2011-09-11 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]
      It is a tragedy, really. But, even if you don't believe it, what you're doing, is helping eventually. Or atleast, it should help with the coping.

    It's hard thing to write about; you show a lot of courgage and confidence to share, and display yourself at the same time. Something that most people, myself included, could not do.

    You've written about it before, I remember, and it seems so long ago. I guess some wounds never do heal. For what it's worth, I think you've shown great triumph in being able to share, and write about such experiences. It proves that he did not win, he did not take away your confidence.

    Very strong piece.

    | Posted on 2011-09-10 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]

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