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    dots Submission Name: One DAY!!!dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 252
    Class/Type: Rant/Serious
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    dotsOne DAY!!!dots
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    There will come a day you will hear from me
    One day you will come to realize and admit to your short-comings as a Mother to your ONLY daughter!
    Yet when that day does comes..
    It will be too late
    For the damage is done
    You had given me a torch to hold forever Reminding me of the pain and suffering you put me threw
    Knowingly allowing me to be sexually abused by your husband for your own rewards
    Money and material object you felt you rightfully deserved!

    There will come a day you will hear from me!
    On this day you will see!
    I do not need you
    Nor do I need the reminders you forced me to have for so long!
    On this day I will be a college graduate
    On this day I will be getting married
    On this day I will be having my first child...
    None of these day WILL have any part of!
    I will be sure you know of the great amazing things going on in my life
    Yet I am more than happy to pour salt into your wound as you did to me!
    Show you how happy I am without you!
    allow you to hear this happiness within my voice
    nevertheless you will not step a foot into these events
    You have NO right!
    I do not care that you are my Mother I disowned you SO long ago...
    Maybe I forgot to give you the fucking memo! OPPS




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    ||| Comments |||
      You haven't changed. The angst still reflects in your writings.

    But now their is a much better flow and control :) Good to see your writings after a long time (My bad - I was out for rather long).

    I want to see something jolly from you now :)

    Take care
    AbsolutelyLost
    | Posted on 2011-09-13 00:00:00 | by AbsolutelyLost | [ Reply to This ]
      Very powerful stuff this and "lasting scars" but i almost feel it is not my right to comment but i decided to keep it academic since i can not relate and it even hurts me to read these pieces. The writing flows very nice smooth and stops you when you are delivering a very powerful line. Describing how you will keep her at bay but still let her know the person you are was some what her failures but you still, because the past makes us who we are today, you've taken this tragic event and made it a burning desire almost revenge and any emotion can be used for positive if channeled correctly. Lovely piece even though the events and terror you went through makes me both angry and my skin crawl. The piece is still written well and very powerful. Great Write.



    Christopher
    | Posted on 2011-09-10 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]


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