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Donor


Author: Rhythmal
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Donor



Bleed for me, nameless, traceless

Not forgotten faceless, shadow

Walking forever near

Close but never here




Submitted on 2011-09-10 14:32:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i actually take this piece literally..

a thank you to all those who donate blood...

we walk with them...they are in our system...that close but never actually near...
we never meet them we just benefit from their kindness...

it's almost like a pay it forward type thing...makes us want to do the same for someone else---be his or her shadow.

jacob
| Posted on 2011-09-10 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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