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    dots Submission Name: Empty Shelldots

    Author: ibelikeso
    ASL Info:    27/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    4.99 - 119/106/24
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       Considering where my life is at right now. Overwhelmed with problems that I can do nothing about. I just wait to see what my judgement will be.

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    dotsEmpty Shelldots

    I am finally done with the man that once was.
    Nothing inside, what I had is now lost.
    Strangled my heart and would not let it beat.
    I gave up on love, accepted life's true defeat.

    I walk as a shell, just hallow inside.
    Live as a man that is neither dead nor alive.
    No reason to laugh or to smile or to cry.
    No guts to plan out the many ways I can die.

    God is not near me, I pushed him away.
    Satan just smiles and lets me continue my ways.
    There is no conscience to tell me what is wrong or right.
    Nothing left to wish for, while I lay awake at night.

    If I had a reason, found a purpose or a voice,
    If I had a different life, a good parent or a choice,
    To have been born in another life or be a different man,
    With answers to the questions, at least a helping hand.

    I have a troubled mind that keeps all my wrongs,
    I misplaced my heart, wonder where it has gone.
    I keep rainy clouds and dark stories to tell,
    Forever alone, as I bid thee farewell.

    Submitted on 2011-09-12 15:40:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i don't see self-pity in this...i see resignation...

    forlorn feeling...pretty well presented with a chilly flow of words...

    life losing its meaning...the end not something i am afraid of...but i know what comes after won't be good..i don't deserve good.

    i like this piece
    | Posted on 2011-09-12 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Pretty good phrasing overall. Nothing spectacular, but who am I to judge?

    I know where you're at right now; I'm close. I've been dealing with a lot of "trapped" feelings, myself. I just feel like nothing will ever work out sometimes and that I'm destined to remain unbloomed.

    Good, relatable write.

    | Posted on 2011-09-12 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]

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