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    dots Submission Name: My Lovedots
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    Author: sandman
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    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsMy Lovedots
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    Today in me a new spirit has
    caressed me in my day
    They have given me something to talk about
    On this new day
    The spirits of the new moon
    Awakes another dark feature in me
    I have broken silence of my darkest secret to my best friend and she is the one I would give my life to save hers

    Today in a tranquil breathe
    I feel her pain, and worry
    Iím searching for the strength embedded in my soul to help her and keep her strong and take us to our dying day together


    There is no one without the other
    together we are always in our soul,
    We love as one
    my soul will protect you always

    Walk down by the riverside
    just you and me, our hands are holding
    each other as we walk and dream

    We had no worries
    we had each other lost in the wonder
    of each otherís touch.

    I feel your thoughts and you feel my pain
    The warmth of our touch can heal each other Itís called the circle
    of what true love really means
    our two lost souls in young adolescence found each other alone one night





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       This one brought me to tears and touched my heart. You write so beautifully in the way you express your emotions. I've often find my self relating to your writing's on a personal level, this one hit home with me today. That's what makes you such a great poet and one of my Favorite
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    Christie
    | Posted on 2011-09-13 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]


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