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    dots Submission Name: Common Glancesdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsCommon Glancesdots
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    radio waves have fascinated the frontal lobe in my brain
    and consistently tarnish the silver lining of my steadfast tears, touched by the shortness of breath and life
    overwhelmed by four hours of selfless, simple and pure goodness displayed by human beings

    it is within me
    within you
    and all the yawning in the world cannot seem to suffocate the textures of portraits, displaying the character with her sense of smell
    (my how large your nose is)
    not always deceiving with how much you can see (my oh my what big eyes you have)
    make believe


    Sometimes I write things that are fantasy only to realize it is a dream
    that when I take a step it is always in the direction of my imagination
    when I speak I am telling stories that have whispered to me

    somewhere in the abyss there is a black hole surrounded by billions and billions more water than we hold here on earth

    and what is the capacity to love out there in space




    Submitted on 2011-09-14 09:42:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It seems that you and I live and thing in different realms ... it becomes kind of difficult for me to interpret and blend along the realms you portray in your words ... Coming back when i am saner might make me associate more with your writings

    My apologies ... for not being able enough to understand and appreciate your pieces ...

    However I did like this line a lot:

    "Sometimes I write things that are fantasy only to realize it is a dream"

    Sort of makes me understand parts of what you write ...

    Good luck ..
    AbsolutelyLost
    | Posted on 2011-09-23 00:00:00 | by AbsolutelyLost | [ Reply to This ]
      i haven't seen much of those four hours....i wish i saw more...maybe in our dreams people are like that...they really care about each other more than themselves...

    i like this...and the allusion to red riding hood....kind of like the wolf in sheep's clothing...

    let me help you! but then what is meant is --let me help you and then help myself to whatever i can get from you in the end....

    good deeds for the sake of good deeds...a dying art...
    but not the art of this poem..which expresses its feelings quite nicely..

    i like the first two lines but would like to see them broken up a bit...maybe into four lines...

    i run out of breath.


    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-09-16 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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