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    dots Submission Name: I am a Vesseldots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 205
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
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       it never goes away ... the pain... the sorrow.. i can never run fast enough..


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    The pain forever resides within me
    As if I am a living, walking vessel of my past sorrows
    Forever reliving my painful tragedies
    Lost within this darkness... wrapped up within its poison

    I believed you had my best intention in mind
    I felt you loved me as your own daughter

    Yet, I see now, you did not love me… you had anything but my best intention in mind
    For, all I am now is a living, breathing vessel of my own past
    *soon to be my own demise*
    Full of the tragedies I experienced, at your hands

    You took my innocents, You took my natural beauty from me…
    In return you gave me darkness and pain I forever live with
    Day in and day out I relive the abuse to place upon me each night...
    I could only fight you off for so long...
    Eventually you manage to stripe me of my pride beat me down emotionally…

    Years have passed since you last touched me...
    However, the pain exceeds what I felt then
    For, I am a breathing, living, and walking vessel of this past abuse...





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    ||| Comments |||
      My hat's off to you. It takes courage to put words to these feelings. I have written pieces about my past....I rarely share them...but they have helped me to express the secrets which kept me imprisoned in my shame. Keep writing...You are not alone. Recovery is possible...I am working on mine...not easy but oh so worth it. I look forward to reading more from you.

    Kind regards,

    EW
    | Posted on 2011-09-18 00:00:00 | by EW61 | [ Reply to This ]
      That's a very raw and emotionally engaging piece. When I was younger I replayed and relived pains to the point that energy dominated my life.

    I can encourage you to respect the emotion, and work to move on in living NOW; TODAY; THIS MOMENT...there is no place for the past there and you make IT whatever you want.

    I don't discount this piece because I've been there too. Sending you Love, Peace, Joy, Abundance, Beauty & Prosperous Healthy Smiles to Share ;-)
    | Posted on 2011-09-15 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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