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    dots Submission Name: it sounded kick-ass on the way homedots
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    Author: isabella
    Elite Ratio:    5.56 - 803/905/472
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsit sounded kick-ass on the way homedots
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    (these thoughts want to slide
    like mudslinging cowgirls).

    slide, i say. slide.
    (it's a place to start).

    and i'm stoned and full of joe's. my fingers still greasy
    from just-too-right rings.

    i'm curving it. looking out for deer.
    tunes are playing when betsy has an orgasm. i smile.

    makes her shutter-bump worth it. (she's going to hell).
    hell, i tell her, new tires are coming too. just you wait

    till i peel my onion eyes back to the soul of their beginnings;
    before bourbon tasted good and walking wasn't hard.

    i'm standing these days. full of worry. not worrying
    about what the outcome will be.

    i haven't fallen yet. on ice. hit my head or otherwise. though i cut my finger just last week; bleed like a bitch for the pinhole it was.

    and she said: icicles are patient. and later:
    if you write something about it, let me see.





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      I love this one.
    | Posted on 2012-11-20 00:00:00 | by Vancrown | [ Reply to This ]
      Very cool!

    Jane
    | Posted on 2011-10-24 00:00:00 | by JanePlane | [ Reply to This ]
      Gave me goosebumps. Especially the line about icicles.
    | Posted on 2011-10-15 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      i still like it as much as the first time...and you know i loved it then....

    me
    | Posted on 2011-09-16 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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