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    dots Submission Name: Water~*~ Light ~*~ Shadow ~*~dots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsWater~*~ Light ~*~ Shadow ~*~dots

    Water Light Shadow
    Visions Togetherness
    Speaking Volumes
    Without Words
    As Wind Uplifts
    Playing Birds
    Soaring SpirITs
    Full-O Glide
    Divine adventure
    BE the ride

    Water Light Shadow
    Reflective Voice
    All is Unreal
    In Time
    As Poets Capture All
    In Rhyme
    Nurturing Verse
    Perfect Song
    Come One, Come All
    Sing Along

    Epiphany 9-15-2011 Tiffany McAchran

    Submitted on 2011-09-16 15:44:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I enjoyed the rhythm, imagery and message of your poem. You captured the feelings of the moment. I agree with the previous comments about caps in general...however "BE the ride " works for me. It reminds me of the lessons I learned in yoga. While practicing the asanas, my teacher would remind us to"Feel the breeze, breath and....just be". Thank you for posting this!


    | Posted on 2011-09-18 00:00:00 | by EW61 | [ Reply to This ]
      kind of a nice anthem for poets in general...

    i like the wording...not that comfortable with all the caps....don't feel those are necessary for emphasis..the words are enough...

    "be the ride" yes "be the ride"

    reminds me of some lines of "ars poetica"

    mute, silent...wordless as a flight of birds...

    it is the feel of the words together rather than the words drawing attention to themselves.

    | Posted on 2011-09-16 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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