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    dots Submission Name: End Of A Broken Heartdots

    Author: kession
    ASL Info:    18~M~ok
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 115/156/63
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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    dotsEnd Of A Broken Heartdots

    Goin for a drive,
    Leavin all the lights off,
    Best steer clear,
    Or they'll be callin the cops.

    All on the scene,
    Bodies so mangled,
    They can't tell if its me.

    Pulled from the wreckage,
    They see somethin in my hand,
    It's a picture of you,
    But you just never could understand.

    When I said I couldn't live without you,
    I meant every word,
    You thought I was just bein dramatic,
    I jumped the curb.

    As I lay here dying,
    With nothin left to lose,
    The only thoughts on my mind,
    Are of a happy me and you.

    You said and did it all,
    When you told me we were done,
    That you were no longer in love with me,
    That I was no longer "the one".

    But don't feel guilty,
    Don't cry a single tear,
    I'll always be lookin down my love,
    I'll always be near.

    William Elzea

    Submitted on 2011-09-16 19:25:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yeah, quite disturbing...and sad.

    Lots of people take things for granted, because if he had paid attention to what she was saying, maybe he would have realised she was serious. she might not have died.

    Nice work.
    | Posted on 2011-09-22 00:00:00 | by Amma | [ Reply to This ]
      This is rather depressing.

    And I'd imagine that was your intention.
    If it was, your wish was a big success I may say.

    And I could only imagine the girl, heart broken and shattered.
    Now dead.
    | Posted on 2011-09-18 00:00:00 | by MyPeriodical | [ Reply to This ]

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