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    dots Submission Name: Missives of the Deepdots

    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsMissives of the Deepdots

    Tonight as you enter
    that dystopian adventure
    beyond the pale-wall
    that most misconstrue to be sleep
    know that I shall have your back.
    I will be your personal Spartan set
    with spear and shield held high
    ready to fortify you with
    undivine attention.
    As you recline with inward-looking
    eyes and gaze upon midnights
    violet madness.
    Remember I am bound
    within your shadow.
    I will render
    not tender kisses
    but steel in my missives
    personally modified to keep
    you sighing deep.
    I cannot be made of tenderness
    until together we reach
    that mystic state
    known as
    the crack of dawn.

    Submitted on 2011-09-17 02:45:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The idea of a guardian angel in one's dreams isn't so novel,
    but a Spartan? Brilliant twist.

    Spear and shield among a dystopian landscape, conveyed to the dreamer in steel proclamations...quite a stark path to tread towards dawn.

    It would be a major drag to have one's dreams controlled or regulated in any way...and a Spartan would be handy to have for personal defense in such a case.

    Interesting write.
    Thanks for the read.

    | Posted on 2011-09-25 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      I can ditto the "I do kind of feel that dystopia is difficult for me to fathom . " that Bruce mentioned, although as Czech/English I kind of have him bracketed geographically.
    "beyond the pale-wall" is rather neat. Crack of dawn as a mystic state... somewhat sublime genius, obviously divine in origin. Else that or it's just some dirty sexual innuendo. Reader's choice. Love those choices.
    | Posted on 2011-09-24 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      Dale :
    Did I ever tell you I wrote a book called "Id Conclusion" ? I really relate to your take on the subject here . I do kind of feel that dystopia is difficult for me to fathom . After all I'm German , I live for the fight . Defend her with far flung missives of steel , oh yah , I've been known to strop my buck knife on the strings of my guitar before composing love songs . Believe me I really feel you here . I don't know , just my two cents worth . I really seem to relate your feelings here , contrarily I like it better when my women fight by my side . Maybe thats chauvinistic but I actually expect them to want to . Maybe I've been watching too many reruns of Xena .

    | Posted on 2011-09-18 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]

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