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    dots Submission Name: Star Kissed?dots

    Author: JanePlane
    ASL Info:    125/F/everyplane
    Elite Ratio:    6.77 - 417/433/131
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsStar Kissed?dots

    Who here ate my chicken of the sea, my tuna of the farm?

    Who here picked fish clean from a can
    paired it with vegetables
    and worked in white oily stuff all at once?

    Who here would call such a biting thing a meal?

    Is it the same one who makes jokes of some
    poor whore's smelly cunt and fish,
    all the while dropping lines to see what he'll come up with?

    Not a mermaid, I assure you.

    You claim you fed it to my cat and called him pussy?

    Tell me, do you think you'll ever get your peanut butter
    in my chocolate?

    You are a dog.

    Submitted on 2011-09-17 15:12:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i agree with jacob :) this is something really very intense. the last line shook my eyelids and i unconsciously thought.. me? oh!
    | Posted on 2011-09-24 00:00:00 | by Iram | [ Reply to This ]
      be my Reeses!

    mmm my--this is intense....you want me to be just what you constantly make fun of ...put down

    you will never catch your mermaid...i will not bite...

    i want respect, not your bait.

    this thrashes in a sassy sort of way.

    | Posted on 2011-09-17 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      oh wow, this threw me off quite a bit. definately had to stretch to see the sexual allusions in this. i guess i've been a dog in the past in this context, not so much in a manner that meant i was trying to put my peanut butter in some ones chocolate..more so i have left lines out there to try and gather context, never to get sex by the end.. can't say i've ever heard that allusion but one thing going into another thing can always be used as a sexual entondra. but yeah manipulative misleads for the sake of personal means is very doggish and i'm glad i never reached a point in my life where this was my intent. somehow beastiality fits.
    | Posted on 2011-09-17 00:00:00 | by cornonthekob | [ Reply to This ]

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