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    Author: Black Rock Tractor
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 555/824/140
    Words: 292
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    There wasnít a thing that I could say
    Wasnít a thing that I could do
    Everything
    was said and done, my dear
    before I ever met you

    This unsteady heart
    A tumble
    weed in the wind,
    It tosses and turns,
    forgets to remember,
    But damn itíll love you till the end
    Till the last burning ember

    Lines keep drawing themselves around here
    Dividing up the earth
    This sides yours and that ones mine
    Goddamnit who gives a fuck

    They said now son you need a job
    You need to be a man
    They said son goddamn, goddamn, goddamn
    We just donít understand

    The sun sets on the moment
    The train it passes by
    The toll way takes my dollars but it
    Doesnít ask me why
    Iím looking so lonely

    Take your rubber biscuit to the
    Corner and leave it for the mindless
    Me, Iíll take the cream and sugar
    But donít mistake for a beggar

    I never sold a drug that wasnít wanted
    Never told a lie that wasnít asked for
    Never slept with a woman that didnít need it
    Never gave her what she wanted

    Iím just stuck in my apartment
    Stuck in my condition
    Stuck in my goddamn self just hoping
    Someone else is listening

    And the sun sets on the moment
    The train it passes by
    The toll way takes my money
    And I never ask it why

    Well the mood begins to settle
    Iím thinking I just might survive

    When the next girl comes my way
    Iíll have to treat her right

    But we all know already that I just canít
    change

    The only thing left for me is making
    fucking money




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    ||| Comments |||
      I have to agree with Runes, you do entertain. I'm not big on profanity and find it a little distracting but here it seems to be purposeful as opposed to being just a cheap way to seem powerful. It's a character you paint that walks off the screen so to speak. becomes real. Good work that.
    | Posted on 2011-09-18 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      It's like a pre-pimping sonnet of sorts... I actually like this greatly. I don't get out much to comment anymore, but when I see your name, I know I'll always be entertained to read. This one is really good. I like the additional lines thrown in here and there after the rhyme... it keeps a tumultuous rolling feeling going

    Much like life.
    Much like the next
    whatever comes.

    Really enjoyed this one.
    | Posted on 2011-09-18 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]


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