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    dots Submission Name: Prayers for Strengthdots
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    Author: my shadow
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 291/150/48
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsPrayers for Strengthdots
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    1.
    When bearers of lies
    hurl their spears at my heart,
    May I have strength
    to breathe them aside
    with truth.

    2.
    When Officious buzzards swoop down
    to steal flesh from my bones,
    may I have strength
    to hold their necks with my hands
    and transform those birds
    into doves.





    Submitted on 2011-09-18 00:19:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Happy day ~*~ I love this minimalistic piece for it's power with smiles to share ;-)
    | Posted on 2011-09-29 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I very much agree with Jacob.

    Officious buzzards , thought that was clever.
    | Posted on 2011-09-19 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem reminds me of Buddhist living with the emphasis on breath and compassion.
    This is a beautiful piece. If I could make just one suggestion it would be to tweak the last bit...just a little.

    Ex: to hold their necks with my hands
    and transform those birds
    into doves

    could read:
    to hold their necks in my hands
    and transform them to doves.

    Just a little thing. I look forward to reading more from you. Thanks for sharing this.

    Kind regards,

    EW
    | Posted on 2011-09-18 00:00:00 | by EW61 | [ Reply to This ]
      "breathe them aside/ with truth"

    that is quite a powerful line.
    | Posted on 2011-09-18 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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