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    dots Submission Name: my mooddots
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    Author: Rainin_Raspbery
    ASL Info:    22/F/Edmonton/AB/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.45 - 145/140/109
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsmy mooddots
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    Mope mope mipe mipe around
    inside my soul i want to fold
    no longer seeking happiness
    only feeling mindful and trotting along
    I no longer feel a song
    i want to yawn
    i want to stop being a pawn
    it is all to much work
    it is all to much bussle
    id rather do nothing
    id rather be gone
    letting my soul live on
    leaving my body and mind to rest




    Submitted on 2011-09-18 01:17:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Sounds like a release, wanting piece, tired of the principles that are typically used to maintain it. Wanting rest. Release.

    I do relate to this piece.


    I no longer feel a song
    i want to yawn

    something about this i liked.
    | Posted on 2011-09-19 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      I dig it. I sometimes feel that way too. Mipe is a new one but it works for me. Really like the line about trotting along. I did feel you were stretching it with the inside my soul i want to fold inversion. Why not just I want to fold inside my soul? - Jim
    | Posted on 2011-09-18 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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