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    dots Submission Name: Love Medots
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    Author: SetmyselfonFire
    Elite Ratio:    2.83 - 41/55/47
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       These words all came directly from my overemotional heart, and my ever so thankful for imagination.


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    dotsLove Medots
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    Its the smell of your embrace
    that keeps my nerves alive.
    Its like your lips are laced
    sweet anti kryptonite.
    When we're tearing out our hearts
    and our emotions smear the walls
    The demons linger in the dark
    like our scream's their mating call
    That's when all I want is your kiss
    and your hands to cup my face
    To say, "Where's the 'Love Me' that we missed,
    in these die hard words we race?''

    Love me when I'm shaking
    and my fist goes through the wall
    Tell me that you can't resist
    the way that my hair falls.
    Hold my hand,teach me how to dance
    while I'm stepping on your feet
    While you tell me all that's on your mind
    is the way that our eyes meet.
    Call me when I'm lonely
    & my heart is sore and bruised
    Throw the pain down from my shoulders
    & whisper "All I want is YOU."




    Submitted on 2011-09-18 05:09:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was written magnificently. I absolutely loved it. It flowed very well, the imagery was fantastic, and the emotions poured off the screen.
    This is definitely going into my favs.

    Keep up the good work and I'll keep reading.

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    | Posted on 2011-09-20 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. Wow. Wow. I love the concept of this. And the words flowed so perfectly together.

    The only problem was the first two line, for me they could have been worded differently. It didn't flow much like the rest, I don't know. It may just be me.

    But the rest, was maginificent, flawless. I have to say, Im going to favorite this. Hehe. I hope I see more writing from you :)
    | Posted on 2011-09-19 00:00:00 | by Dark Dann | [ Reply to This ]


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