For a song? Hmm....I'm not so sure either. I'm not trying to bash you or anything, there is some potentical in this, trust me. Try not to stick to simple rhymes, be creative with your writing. Work wonders with words, don't create flat sentences with similar endings. Songs, poems, all that, are windows to a world. It's suppose to show US what's in your heart, what you feel, what inspires you.