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    dots Submission Name: Never Againdots
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    Author: Lareth
    ASL Info:    23/M/WA
    Elite Ratio:    5 - 103/139/48
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Story/Death
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    Description:
       what if you kept learning from your mistakes?
    you could never anticipate something before it happened, something that gave you a loss so deep, that what kills you more, is not that it happened, but that you could have prevented it?
    I learned the hard way
    this is the tribute to my lost heart, for my own mistakes


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    dotsNever Againdots
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    I will never again mistake glue for soap.

    I will never again pick my nose after art class.

    I will never again bite my nails after cooking with vinegar

    I will never again play with a knife near a power outlet.

    I will never again dive for a taser in a swimming pool.

    I will never again apologize for what I did to you.

    I will never again ignore you when you say goodbye.

    I will never again say I love you.

    I will never again see your face.

    I will never again weep over your casket.

    And I will never again forgive myself.

    Because I never paid attention.

    I'm sorry...

    Goodbye.





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    ||| Comments |||
      i like how this moves from the mundane everyday things...and works its way to the more serious "never agains"

    to the goodbye...to someone i should have paid more attention to if "ever again" i would have had the chance...

    but unfortunately sometimes people are gone before we can let them know what they meant to us...and wow that vinegar tastes sour, acidy..like the feelings of regret.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-09-20 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      That is a harrowing trip into Never Again ... lines of verse used one by one like blows of a hammer. I think it is a fine poem because it hurt me. Hmf! I think too much, so I appreciate so much the works of art that make me feel what I ought to have been feeling already ....
    | Posted on 2011-09-20 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]


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