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    dots Submission Name: Winter Once Againdots

    Author: awastedsky
    ASL Info:    22/f/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 116/151/98
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsWinter Once Againdots

    I left the house with a knit scarf round my neck
    that my best friend from childhood knitted
    my favorite color
    imperfections visible
    but only if you look closely.

    And I realized
    as I traipsed outside
    that exhalations were visible and
    I should probably remember to
    unearth my mittens from their summer hiding place
    in the garage downstairs.

    In Alaska, you learn to smell the snow, just a few weeks before you can see it on the mountains.
    And the weather silences
    even the most persistent cacauphony
    of traffic sounds on the nearby highway
    the traveler
    even with three hundred thousand people imposing their city-esque lifestyles on your backyard.

    And I realized, as I embraced the season change, for better or for worse
    my solemn divide
    this time
    may not just be the cycle of life
    but a representation of
    the beginning of my end.

    Submitted on 2011-09-21 04:53:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      There is so much bitter truth here I find it heartbreaking in a way, so much that makes one unravel from a distance.

    I dislike winter.
    It doesn't snow here, though; it only rains.
    Enough to want to make one shrivel away.

    This is wonderful writing.
    | Posted on 2011-09-21 00:00:00 | by trinityfinger | [ Reply to This ]
      something tells me i should dress for the end...i need to be prepared for my winter....i have fooled myself long enough that summer would be endless, that i may live forever ...but amidst the sounds of the traffic, of people doing their daily routines...the sound of everything moving forward...this will be the last fall for me...there is the scent of mortality, my mortality...

    except for the "knit" and then "knitted" in the first two lines, which feels accidentally redundant...this piece feels so powerful to me...the analogy works quite well...

    especially love the alaska stanza...

    | Posted on 2011-09-21 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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