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    dots Submission Name: A minute to this morningdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsA minute to this morningdots
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    Almost lost to distraction
    almost guarded by my belt
    final faults without value tip toeing on the edges of my surreality frankly speaking things that I wouldn't hear from anyone else

    this is a tiresome view full of tiresome opinions

    different clouds rolled in
    when I started whispering under my breath
    half heartedly
    until I heard myself speaking
    and the atmosphere started to change

    now this gloom and this rain breath peace to me
    underneath my favorite comfortable sweater I have found the
    PASSION
    to relax
    and withdraw
    and let somone else work this one out
    I am tired
    and I want to watch myself take this coffee break




    Submitted on 2011-09-21 07:37:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I want to join the coffee break :)
    | Posted on 2011-09-22 00:00:00 | by AbsolutelyLost | [ Reply to This ]


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