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    Author: angelagresham19
    ASL Info:    18-Female Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    0.61 - 66/32/42
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       this is how i feel in the world


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    you say that everything would be fine and you say i can come to you when i need someone to lean on and to talk to. you say that love me.
    but i can only if how much you've hurt me in the past.
    when i texed you blow me off then your fucked up Girlfriend sent some text saying shit. you've made me so upset i cut myself more then once.knowing i don't have any friends to talk to. i can only think of suicide. my mom is crying beggin me not to do it but i all i said was why i cant do it anymore.
    now i sit here all aone with so one to talk to and what did i do to you to make you hurt is this all my felt is it ? it you dont love me anymore?




    Submitted on 2011-09-21 11:58:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very sad poem. nicely writen.
    | Posted on 2011-09-27 00:00:00 | by janekostman09 | [ Reply to This ]


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