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    dots Submission Name: I Want A Wifedots
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    Author: mdsouza
    Elite Ratio:    4.57 - 161/110/25
    Words: 311
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    Description:
       Had to do my college project "I Want A Wife". A feminist piece of writing based on the fact that "Who Wouldn't?" given the multitude of chores a married woman has to deal with.

    I began my presentation with this poem ..

    Hope you like it!


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    dotsI Want A Wifedots
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    My dad is a seafarer
    And when he's back from his trip,
    He gets down to telling us the tales
    Of life on board his ship.

    The crewmen are hard-working
    And quite a jolly lot.
    I learn't that men can tease their wives
    Much more than what I thought.

    They gather together at break time,
    Feeling like "bachelor boys"
    And although their jokes are hilarious,
    Their cheekiness annoys!

    "Chief Officer got a baby boy!"
    "Congrats!" "Proud Dad!" "How nice!"
    "And how does your wife manage at home?"
    "She wanted kids ... Well, 'twas her choice."

    One guy says, "I can handle kids
    Only up to a point ..
    Yet, wifey nags that all the efforts gone
    Into child rearing have not been joint".

    "Now kitchen work's not my cup of tea.
    It's torture for a man ..
    That's when I quietly sign my next contract
    And leave, as soon as I can!"

    "Oh wives, they can be darlings ..
    But they can be a pain too ..
    And they say that it's a man's world ..
    What has the world come to?"

    I couldn't help looking sarcastic
    As I smiled at the men folk's talks
    And watched my mom serve tea and biscuits
    And pick my father's socks.

    Of course, mom did it with much love
    And we can take it with good humour, once in a while
    Yet, I think, again, I tend to justify
    That women should remain docile.

    There is the world of feminists.
    They make their point from where they seldom budge.
    Then there's the world of reality
    To which you might wake up with a little nudge.

    Perhaps, our women don't have it all that bad.
    And, we could pause to think about it.
    I hope we don't have too many instances
    Too hard, to admit.




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      Very well done. Your use of poetic devices work. Your rhyming seems effortless so as not to be noticed. I enjoyed the overall tenor. At the end I had a smile.
    | Posted on 2011-09-25 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      I appreciate this.

    I do pick out my fellas socks. And his pants and his underwear, and I love it. He is part of me, I am part of him. We support on another. He brushed my hair.

    Anyways.
    Invading you with personal things,

    back to this piece,

    I liked the conversational tone that was used in this. How it isn't strongly opinionated, but light and creative, witty consistently. I thought this piece was really observant and original. I would have given you an A.
    | Posted on 2011-09-21 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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